Just want some feedback on if this is catching and gets the point of the site across. Thank you in advance for the help! (LINKED)There is a place for lost souls.They call it Wonderland.It has been a long time since our world reflected that name.Our beautiful world is now destroyed and many fight to keep it that way while others fight to escape.The Queen of Spades is determined to follow others that have escaped before, and return to the real world.Choose your path.Will you fight to escape?Or will you drag others down to remain in the land forever?Join Card Rebellion!(LINKED) Jabberwocky System(LINKED) - Tell others when you think they are being naughty IC. Caterpillar Directions(LINKED) - At a loss for where to go? get some advice from our amazing Caterpillars. Cheshire Quests(LINKED) - If you are up for some mischief and a lot of mayhem then go see what a Cheshire has in store for you to do. Canons(LINKED) - We have multiple canons so it's likely that a canon that you covet is still available in another kingdom. Adoptables(LINKED) - Pre-built characters that you can make your own. Word/Paragraph counts(LINKED) - We have no word or paragraph count. We in Wonderland value quality of posts over quantity of words. Notifications - No more hunting for replies that you don't know if you got and shifting around through posts to find yours. Now you can be notified when someone has responded to your posts via email or on the website itself. Rating - (LINKED)
Just some thoughts I don't think giving the same graphic twice is necessary, and having two sections with key sentences as well as 2 paragraphs is also overdoing it, IMHO. Making it shorter will give you the space to add some OOC material (see below). For ease of use you could add links to more than just to the homepage. like the newbie guide/starter guide, the application, the wiki (or your setting) and the advertise forum. The latter is a courtesy to the person whose boards you are spamming up so they can return the favour more quickly. Your ad is all IC. I'm missing important OOC info like level of literacy, wordcount or not, freeform or moderated, rating, the age of your board (how long it has run) etc. Hope this helps. It looks like an intriguing concept!
I feel like you could benefit from a stronger image. The image itself is a bit illogical, I'm trying to imagine why the cards have such large shadows that don't match up to the same light source. :\ I also agree that you shouldn't post the same image twice. Where the second image goes you should have something like: main page | rules | getting started Especially since some boards have images disabled (even though it's awfully rude), and so your link would be lost.
Oh humbug. Why the same image posted twise I didn't even notice. I was so tired last night. It's a completely different image. >_< Fixing now. I can definitely see about changing it up a bit. I mostly made the images and reformatted it a bit but I appreciate the advice. I've heard it both ways (whether you should have the multi-links) and I was curious if anyone has any pros/cons to it? My only con to doing the multi-links is that then they don't get the full impact of the site by simply going to the Plot page because that isn't what they will be staring at all of the time. I can see the pros as well. Certainly will add more OOC info.
I've always learned at the faster they can go to a page they will be looking for anyway, the better it is. Totally stealing your font ad btw!
I'm going to go through it from top to bottom as to what I think would work the best for you. First Paragraph: I personally wouldn't center the first paragraph that's underneath your image. Centered text in paragraph form is very difficult to read and will turn people away before actually finishing reading it. Stick it into a block paragraph, rather than just lines. I think beefing it up a little would be perfect - how was the world destroyed? Who is the Queen of Spades (I'm only familiar with the Queen of Hearts tbh)? You don't have to go into grave detail, but those are questions that could be answered with a couple of descriptive adjectives here and there. Second Paragraph: I don't think the second image is necessary, but if you'd like to keep it, I would center it. I also think the OOC portion could be set into a summarized paragraph of the OOC things you have for members to do. It'd be a much faster read and shortens the length of your ad. Long advertisements generally take more effort to read than the average person wants to spend time on - something short and sweet (and attention getting) is the perfect route. Also, I don't think you'll need to explain what canons and adoptables are, as it's a pretty universal term when it comes to our corner of the internet. I'm thinking something more like: Some of our Amazing OOC features are: the Jabberwockey system - tell other characters when you think they are being naughty, Caterpillar directions - advice from our helpful caterpillars on (I'm not really sure what the advice is on, so you could put that in here), Cheshire Quests - explained here. You could also mention your canons and adoptables that are available for play as well as your no word count and rating. Underneath it all, center your links - home page, canons, adoptables, rules, setting or whatever is important to know before joining. I'd keep it between 3 -6 one to two worded links. Hope I was helpful and best of luck!
