Ok. So, I have this plot, but I'm not sure I'm gonna take it anywhere. I just wanted to know if it was any good or not. Comments and critism welcome.

based off the controversial story, "the lottery" by shirley jackson.

once upon a time there was a small, humble farming town of the name bellemonte. this quaint town had a very traditional community, with many festivals and traditions that still went on, even though they were started generations ago. everything is passed down here, from recipes to hand-me-down clothes, sentimental trinkets to traditions. though it's in the 1990's, and modern technology is slowly creeping up on them, this town still remains quite secluded from the outside world.

most of the people in bellemonte, naturally, are hardcore traditionalists. their motto is, "when a tradition has been passed down from generation to generation, there must be some good in it," and stick by that through and through. there are, however, a very limited few that have started to doubt what they've known their entire lives, and even fewer who are completely against it altogether.

among all festivals, the lottery is one of the most fondly celebrated in bellemonte. it's a joyous celebration, bringing everyone together. the saying goes, "lottery in june, corn be heavy soon," so it has to be true -- right? the lottery brings the promise of good crops for the year, and without it, they believe that bad luck will befall them all. and that's certainly not something that they want in their darling little town.

the superstitious old fools.

the lottery takes place every year, every spring. all villagers are to be there, starting from the age of sixteen. after the names get checked off on the list, everyone draws a slip of paper. whispering goes up through the crowd; who's got it? as everyone checks to see who's got the white slip of paper with the large black dot, the whispers raise to shouts in the excitement. "is it the dunbars?" one asks. "the hutchison's! the hutchison's have it!" and with that, silence follows. the hutchison family lines up, each drawing their own ticket. for a moment, the whole village square is tense, waiting. who got the black ticket the second time around?

the excitement starts to break through, though no one utters a word. finally, the head of town hall tells the youngest to open his ticket; a sigh of relief goes through the villagers. thank goodness, it's not the young'un. next, the wife. she doesn't open her ticket; no, she's too busy holding her son, thankful it wasn't him. of course she's scared. scared for herself. scared for her husband. now it's his turn to open his ticket, since his wife won't. he opens it, let's it fall to the ground, his face tense. scared.

as the ticket falls, a shout raises. hutchinson's ticket was blank. "it's tessie! get her!" they cheer. everything moves quickly now; everyone, of all ages, grabs the stones that were so neaty gathered only a short while ago. the pile becomes a mess, and soon it's gone altogether, the stones hurled across the hall at hutchison's wife. the lottery isn't all fun and games. it's about stoning the "lucky" winner.

tessie, the lucky winner, screams. her voice carries over the bodies, the faces filled with the excitement of yet another stoning. some faces are pained, wishing it wasn't someone they knew that they were stoning, but relieved it wasn't them this time. as the stones hit the cowering girl, her screams falter with the pain. "it's not right, it's not fair!" she yells, and another scream escapes her lips. and then there's black. pure, solid black. there's safety in this black.

there is no more screaming. the villagers ease off, the stones settling on the ground around the body. the lottery is done and over with, it's announced, and it's time to get back to their daily routines. but still, there's another lottery next spring to look forward to. as the crowd thins, hutchison and his son hold each other close, staring sadly at the loss of a wife, a mother. under his breath, he whispers, "there must be something more."

That was extremely intriguing. I would really like to see you go on with it. I want to play the game that this would accompany.

this is a really heavy plotline and i agree with Jane - very intriguing. i think if you can pull it off this will make an awesome plot for a site ^_^ good work

I like it. It's very good, it just doesn't go anywhere. What happens after the lottery? But other than that, pure genious. I loved it.

I agree with Fablezzz, it doesn't have much of a long-term effect. It's an interesting and good basis for a plot, but it needs more. There are many ways you could take it, one of which adding a supernatural aspect to it. The Lottery immediately connected to witch hunts in my head (probably because of the stoning. . .).

Yah, just find that other oomph, and make it! Haha.

It's great ;)

Is this based on the short story the Lottery? At any rate, I think it is a very good idea, but I agree that it is going to need some long term basis to continue RP. However, I would be interested to see where it goes.

Thanks for your comments.

I obviously hadn't thought much of anything longterm, but if I get bored again I'll definitely think about it. And to Tayeko Escobar: yes, this is based on that. Hence the little "based off the controversial story "the lottery" by shirley jackson" at the top of it. ;]]

Wow, I really love this! It is so different and dark. Really spooky like because it is unexpected. There are always those horror stories of the darker side of small towns under the wholesome attitudes and smiles. To make it more long term you could always incorporate what happens to those who are killed. Making it more supernaturalish. Maybe those deceased come back to haunt the still living and things start happening or something.

I do not know lol but it is still really interesting and I would love to be in a rp that had something dark like this. :)